Fly by Thought
Sunday, July 9th, 2006
These written rhetorics I read
exceed the daily dialogs between
routine conversationalists exchange
of speech arranged on the fly by thought
wrought with weighted words wound
around past experiences influential
designer hands in motion thin
perceptions of peoples faces masking
private places from phantom truths
tracing the one and only truth that these
written rhetorics I read
exceed the daily dialogs between
you and I
I like this close: “only truth that these
written rhetorics I read
exceed the daily dialogs between
you and I”
Curious about what thought or experience or feeling prompted this poem…
Don, A comment my mother made some time ago about my poetry prompted me to write this. She said, she was suprised that the poetry I write really comes from “ME” because I don’t speak like I write. I explained, If a poet speaks exactly like he or she writes, many people would be left with a “huh, what did he say?” reaction.
Interesting, fun, the way you broke the lines makes it a little challenging to read, to find what’s in there…
Happy birthday!!!
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This poem has a wonderful musical quality with all the alliteration and assonance. I can see multiple meanings in your ending as well. Obviously the one you mentioned, Travis, is there, about the “quality” of poetic speech versus conversational speech. But also it could be read a bit like escapism, like reading (or writing) poetry as a surrogate for personal conversation “in person.” Or that the poetry the speaker reads/writes is not just a higher “quality” of speech, but is of greater importance and value. Nice work!
something about this stuff is very familiar to me… is it the content or the feel or the form? whatever it is it was a comfortable feeling….!
Hullo
Lovely poetry!
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anonymous julie, was is difficult to read as structured?
Mike, thank you for your wonderful insight! You are quite right. I really appreciate your feebback.
emptyvessel, I’m glad you were able to connect with this poem. Perhaps it was a combination of the form and content that made your feel comfortable.
V Ramaswamy, I will check out your blog, thank you for visiting!